Very nice. Loved the plot.
But he fired 11 bullets without reloading?
Pay attention to the small bits like that.

It's good. There is one issue though. There is some high pitched squeaking in the background.

In my opinion, this should be on an album. It seems well done enough!

Damn son, better put this on my ipod.

Very professional. I have heard things like these, but they were actually performed. I recommend you start sending in your work to companies or something.